Hearing the Plot, not the Voices
Sometimes, when writing fiction, you can hear the plot coming out of the character's mouths but not their voices.
Currently, the story is structured in my head but needs fleshed out. I'm going to do a relationship map to build them into more fleshed out characters.
Currently, the story is structured in my head but needs fleshed out. I'm going to do a relationship map to build them into more fleshed out characters.
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Relationship Map and nuking the 1st draft
The relationship map helped me hear their voices better than I did before. Writing was much easier today when I started over.
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RAFT song
Juliet to Nurse
Song about the Perfect Man
to the tune of Off to the Races by Lana Del Rey
My perfect man hates my dad but
I can't deny the way his pilgrim hands
captify me, He has me by my heart
He doesn't have a Capulet past
he doesn't mind that I have a crass cousin duelist
he loves me even when we are far apart
Swimming pool hide from the guard
sneak in my room window after dark
Marry me in the friar's cell
Gotta promise not to tell, cuz our daddies ain't gonna like....yeah
My moon and my stars, make jealous the sun
Be a good Montague, change my name, hon
My moon and my stars, makes jealous the sun
Give me that love's vow, gimme that vow
I'm off with a montague, cutie too, making me his wifey, too
hiding our love from all, cause he's gonna be wanted
Undaunted, chasing all my cousins and I can't get out of my house
cuz my daddy, got mad he, better get here and consumate me
I'm his wifey, lifey, drinking all this vial he
kissed me on my open mouth
when he thought I was dead
Song about the Perfect Man
to the tune of Off to the Races by Lana Del Rey
My perfect man hates my dad but
I can't deny the way his pilgrim hands
captify me, He has me by my heart
He doesn't have a Capulet past
he doesn't mind that I have a crass cousin duelist
he loves me even when we are far apart
Swimming pool hide from the guard
sneak in my room window after dark
Marry me in the friar's cell
Gotta promise not to tell, cuz our daddies ain't gonna like....yeah
My moon and my stars, make jealous the sun
Be a good Montague, change my name, hon
My moon and my stars, makes jealous the sun
Give me that love's vow, gimme that vow
I'm off with a montague, cutie too, making me his wifey, too
hiding our love from all, cause he's gonna be wanted
Undaunted, chasing all my cousins and I can't get out of my house
cuz my daddy, got mad he, better get here and consumate me
I'm his wifey, lifey, drinking all this vial he
kissed me on my open mouth
when he thought I was dead
Day 3 Writing
It's a first draft of scene 1.
Joe and Rachel's section needs a lot of work, but it's best to get something written as opposed to right.
Joe and Rachel's section needs a lot of work, but it's best to get something written as opposed to right.
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Day 4 writing
Adds the 2nd scene.
To do: Look up interviews and newscasts to help get the sound right.
To do: Look up interviews and newscasts to help get the sound right.
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Day 5 Writing
Figured out how to keep John somewhat stoic about what has happened to him but not keep it from the audience. Less written today, but I broke the structure for the 2nd scene.
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Day 6 Writing
After listening to several intreviews with veterens suffering from PTSD, I ended Act 2 and began Act 3.
Also figured out that using the spot on the couch and widening it throughout the portions with the therapist allows not only for visiual variety in the scenes, but also lets the character show how he's opening up and not avoiding his trauma.
Also figured out that using the spot on the couch and widening it throughout the portions with the therapist allows not only for visiual variety in the scenes, but also lets the character show how he's opening up and not avoiding his trauma.
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Day 8 Writing
The use of cuts from therapy to the past can be used to help create the confusion of panic attacks and flashbacks, blurring the lines between the present and the traumas. Possibly even building into a really cool "inside the creature" sequence in black.
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Day 9 Writing
Added a bit of levity before getting into the first of the quick PTSD flashbacks.
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Day 10 Writing
Went to a surprising place. Have a lot of ideas about where to take it.
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Day 12 Writing
Most recent work.
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